The
Importance of an honest Critique
I
have found over the last few years that it is almost impossible to get a really
honest critique. I think it is because people are too afraid to tell the truth
in fear they might upset you, or the person that gave them the story to read.
Then there are those that give a critique that I as the writer thinks, this is
too good to be true.
What follows is a critique of the book I
sent my editor to read to get the hard word. It is the exact transcript with
only the more personal and private words deleted.
ROYAL COURTS OF JUSTICE
ANTHONY M [Italy]
Sunday, 3 February 2013, 10:06
Hi Ian,
I’ve just finished reading XXXXXXX
It’s a very good story, and ought to be worth
publishing. But (and you did ask for realistic criticism!) I don’t think, as it
stands, it’s worth you spending a lot of money to get it edited and published.
The way the story is told is good and quite well
structured for a novel of this length. What it lacks, I think, is much depth to
the characters, even the main ones. Whilst detailed descriptions of the
characters aren’t needed (and, in fact, I think you often try to give too much
descriptive detail about the characters in your writing), what I feel they are
missing is much of how they feel and think, and anything that makes the reader
able to “identify” with one or more of them and really feel part of the story
when reading it. Simply, there’s very little that makes the reader either love
or hate any of them to any great extent, or even to care about what happens to
them. It lacks emotion. Perhaps it would be a little harsh to say so, but it
almost could be a history book just telling what happened, rather than a novel.
As with much of your writing, I feel it doesn’t
quite have the “flow” that makes a novel really “readable”. It’s not just a
matter of grammar or punctuation, although there is a lot that needs
correcting, but rather the way that much of it is phrased. It feels clumsy and
it’s also “flat”, by which I mean that you don’t use language to create high
and low points in the story – such as using shorter, sharper sentences for
action scenes; soft, flowing words for friendship and love; words with hard,
violent consonants when there is anger; and so on.
A good editor will correct any grammatical and
punctuation errors. A really good editor will attend to the phrasing, although
that’s beyond most of them. What an editor can’t do, is put feeling into the
story that comes across to the reader and draws the reader right into the book.
That needs to come from you, and at the moment I don’t think you’ve quite got
it. Unlike XXXXXXXXXXXX this sort of book won’t sell simply because it’s a good
story. It needs very much more than that.
Regards,
The critique above is the reason that I am now
taking another look at my manuscript. I have read through it and I’m in
agreement to all that has been said. There is a lot to do but I am up for the
challenge. I knew there was a lot wrong with the story, but because the story
was born from my imagination I could not see the problem. This kind of
criticism is precise and to the point. I just ask myself why others can’t be as
honest is a mystery. I take all criticism seriously but not the ones that say
the right things but for the wrong reasons.
If a writer allows a friend or relation to read the
book they inevitably arrive back at your doorstep with the words you want to
hear. I doubt very much though that they will be the words of the whole truth,
as no one wishes to upset a friend or relation. So the writer is left with the
only option once more and return to the editor that is set in his ways.
The problem here though, is the fact
that an editor has not always got the time to read your story. This leaves a
break in the chain of writing the story and getting it published, either by
publisher or self publish. I have been pondering this problem for over a year
now and I have finally come up with a solution. I have a plan that will give me
the critique I need from the people I am writing for. What is the plan? Well
until I know whether it is working I will keep that to myself.
Be well Ian.